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posted by [personal profile] benlehman at 09:56am on 05/03/2007
As I walked out in the streets of old Edo
As I walked out in old Edo one day
I spied a young ninja all wrapped in black linen
wrapped in black linen, as cold as the clay

"I can see by your outfit that you are a ninja,"
these words he did say as I softly stepped by
"come sit down beside me and hear my sad story
"I'm slashed through the gut and I know I must die."

It was once in the shadows I used to go killing
once in the shadow I used to go slay
first it was spying, then assassinating
But I'm slashed through the gut and I'm dying today

Get six young shinobi to carry my coffin
six kunoichi to cover their trail
throw bunches of smoke bombs all over my coffin
smoke bombs so that those that seek me will fail

Then sneak along slowly
and creep along lowly
make not a sound as you carry me on
Take me to the deep forest, lay the sod o'er me
I'm a young ninja and I know I've done wrong

Then go send a message to my ninja master
and tell him the ninja that he taught is gone
but please not one word of the bushi who cut me
don't mention his name and his name will pass on

When thus he had spoken the new sun was rising
the streets of old Edo began a new day
we took the young ninja out to the deep forest
and none found the place where he lays to this day

We snuck along slowly
and crept along lowly
make not a sound we carried him on
Into the deep forest, laid the sod o'er him
for we loved our clan-mate, even though he done wrong.
There are 10 comments on this entry. (Reply.)
 
posted by [identity profile] xorphus.livejournal.com at 03:49pm on 05/03/2007
"throw bunches of smoke bombs all over my coffin
smoke bombs so that those that seek me will fail"

Excellent.
 
posted by [identity profile] benlehman.livejournal.com at 04:40pm on 05/03/2007
My favorite bit is that "kunoichi" scans to "dance hall maidens."

yrs--
--Ben
 
posted by [identity profile] mikegentry.livejournal.com at 04:59pm on 05/03/2007
Tears of joy coming out my eyes.
 
posted by [identity profile] kitsuchan.livejournal.com at 05:39pm on 05/03/2007
Yay!
 
posted by [identity profile] zdashamber.livejournal.com at 07:23pm on 05/03/2007
That is pretty freaking awesome.
 
posted by (anonymous) at 08:40pm on 05/03/2007
This used to be the saddest song I knew (when I was around seven or so). Now it made me smile. Very good.

/Anders
 
posted by [identity profile] benlehman.livejournal.com at 08:46pm on 05/03/2007
It's one of my favorite songs, because it's so sad.

yrs--
--Ben
 
posted by [identity profile] rich-forest.livejournal.com at 12:37am on 06/03/2007
There's some nice work here, too:

Then go send a message to my ninja master
and tell him the ninja that he taught is gone
but please not one word of the bushi who cut me
don't mention his name and his name will pass on


I like this verse. It still gets right to the heart of things.
 
posted by [identity profile] benlehman.livejournal.com at 01:42am on 06/03/2007
I stole the bulk of it from Cash:

So go write a letter to my dear old mother
and tell her the cowboy that she loved is gone
but please not one word of the man who did kill me
don't mention his name and his name will pass on

There's something to be said about stealing from the best, though.

I have mixed feelings about the Cash version. It totally eviscerates the original meaning of the song by changing the last line from "for we loved our comrade even though he done wrong," but on the other hand, the verse is pure gold.

yrs--
--Ben
 
posted by [identity profile] rich-forest.livejournal.com at 11:48am on 06/03/2007
Oh yes -- knowing what to keep is as important as knowing what to change.

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